Something I've been working on. How is it so far.?

Question:"blizzard"

She'd been left all day to wonder,
gently whispering my name.
Waiting for her lover,
could it ever be the same.
Outside a blizzard pounding,
the sun burnt black and blue.
Though my knees were trembling,
I trudged my way to you.

Her eyes were closed and waiting,
thinking of her abstinence.
Finally she had found some hope,
but lost her temperance.
I must finally find a way,
there's too much fear in me.
We walk together hand in hand,
have I finally found the key.

Tears were falling on the ground,
do you still recall that day.
Feel me like you never have,
a nightmare lights our way.
Our bleeding hearts together,
pound as if they are now one.
We are now assailants,
forever we must run.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: "blizzard"

She'd been left all day to wonder,
gently whispering my name.
Waiting for her lover,
could it ever be the same.
Outside a blizzard pounding,
the sun burnt black and blue.
Though my knees were trembling,
I trudged my way to you.

Her eyes were closed and waiting,
thinking of her abstinence.
Finally she had found some hope,
but lost her temperance.
I must finally find a way,
there's too much fear in me.
We walk together hand in hand,
have I finally found the key.

Tears were falling on the ground,
do you still recall that day.
Feel me like you never have,
a nightmare lights our way.
Our bleeding hearts together,
pound as if they are now one.
We are now assailants,
forever we must run.

very well done my prince
your work is exceptional
As always I love it

Very nice...she must be pretty special, Henry David Thoreau would be proud

Wow, I too write, but that was way beyond my ability. Dude, that was soooo beautiful. It was catchy and romantic. You should never stop writing, never. The only thing that I didn't love was the line about the blizzard pounding...I'm not sure why, but I personally would like it better if it were set in the summer. Keep on creating!!!

You've definitely got something here. Stick with it =)

nice

i think its very moving, and pretty much well written.
but in the one line, how does 'astinence' fit in there?
or am i just not reading it right?
idkk..
i like it tho :)

woah...verrry good
it's got a nice rhythm, with only one or two minor glitches, that can pretty much be ignore.
i particularly liked...2/4...such a good way to put it.

I liked it .

I love it.

Oh my God I absolutely love this. I wanted to cry when I read it. It has so much feeling and love in it.

Wonderful!

Wow this was really outstanding and it really touched my heart,You really have a way with your words and stanz'a to make the poem to die for ,Nice really nice !!!!

brilliant....genius....i cant think of any other smart words that mean the same thing....lol
oh! dazzling! lol i really liked this one bro! but i still like "sorry " better than anything....lol i cant help it!
~Hara Kantana

If this is the "so far" gimme the rest, well done.

Hey cami may i ask u something???
:) what are you trying to do please leave Y/A cause your the best and that makes ppl lose hope :P
no really
i like it sooo0o0o much and so far so0o0o0o god damn co0ol
i liked ((forever we must run)) its like me and you and blow the rest of the world and (( Our bleeding hearts together,
pound as if they are now one.)) i liked this part and the (( We walk together hand in hand,
have I finally found the key.)) :D i really like it cami :) keep on the good work ;)