Haiku, another try?

Question:The moon-filled sky;
I kneel in shadow and pray
to the infinite.

This form fascinates me, and through attempt (and the valuable feedback of ye, o wise YA folk), I may someday write one I am pleased with. It is a noble quest, I think.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: The moon-filled sky;
I kneel in shadow and pray
to the infinite.

This form fascinates me, and through attempt (and the valuable feedback of ye, o wise YA folk), I may someday write one I am pleased with. It is a noble quest, I think.

This is better, I think it could improved further to be excellent.

Firstly, I think you have to come up with a better word than 'night' because you've already got "moon-filled". Night would be a waste of a word. The right word in there could set a great tone for the poem.

I also think the second line could be improved, I thought about;

"I kneel by reflections, pray"

Something to complete the image.

the syllables are off The formation is 5syllables 7syllables 5syllables

Haiku in English is an odd form. Most Japanese haiku are dense because they reference other images, known situations for poetry. Your poem is simple, literal. No broader references. Not much extra meaning. So its, yeah, ok.

it's okay, atleast you tried, you can't say that for many people