feel when you read my poem?

Question:BUTTER BREAD

Am I better if I have a house made of bricks
Am I better if I make people sick
Am I better if I drive a Mercedes Benz
or what if my child always wins

Am I better if I have a tan
Am I better if I have millions of fans
Am I better if my ducks are lined up in a row
maybe if I have a lot of dough

Am I better if they say I'm a star
Am I better if I go travelling afar
Am I better if I live by the sand
if I have carats on my hand

I am only better
if you say it's said
There is no such thing as better
it is only in your head

There is only different; different ways to butter bread.

~PisceaRising~
July 2, 2006

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: BUTTER BREAD

Am I better if I have a house made of bricks
Am I better if I make people sick
Am I better if I drive a Mercedes Benz
or what if my child always wins

Am I better if I have a tan
Am I better if I have millions of fans
Am I better if my ducks are lined up in a row
maybe if I have a lot of dough

Am I better if they say I'm a star
Am I better if I go travelling afar
Am I better if I live by the sand
if I have carats on my hand

I am only better
if you say it's said
There is no such thing as better
it is only in your head

There is only different; different ways to butter bread.

~PisceaRising~
July 2, 2006

I see a person who the world would deem successful. This poem critiques the societal definition of success, using the concept of relativity.

When I read this poem I think of all of the vain in our world who dare to assume their superiority. Since reality and perception are completely subjective there are no universal truths. Therefore success is only an illusion or an idea, not a concrete fact or state.

I feel as though there is nothing to strive towards in life once we strip away all that we thought we knew. People say follow your passions and that will lead you to success, but even passions are fading and subjective. This means that nothing really matters, we are just existing, however existence becomes more pleasant when we have a carrot to chase after.

I think its very materialistic...

interesting.
i like the middle and end.
but the beginning idk it was a little rough.

it was deep.

sorry,
but I cant take my eyes off your avator!
is that you?!!

Over all, I like it. The second line throws me...when is that ever considered better? It gets the reader a little side-tracked trying to reconcile the thought.
Maybe..... Am I better if my mind is very quick
'''''''''''''''''''''''''''' my resume is thick (re za may)
I put you not at risk
my poems have a kick
my wounds I never lick
Just some thoughts. The poem makes me think of how shallow our values can be. (I looked at your profile ..contacts and fans...funny. Avatar with big boobs...mostly male contacts/fans.....but they're known for being a little shallow :)

I think it needs a scene, or visualization to make the person visualize the picture more.

I think it's good. Better is all about preceptions. You should just do you.

poems like this is worth reading

it very different....i am not trying to be mean or rude, the way i read it seem like....this stuff is about money or better life than be a poor?
if i offeneded you , i am sorry.
that what i feel about it.