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Question:Nightmares

Time for bed our Bobby.

But Mom. not yet, it's only six o'clock.

Come along now, school tomorrow.

Mom, please, please
It really is only six o'clock,
And Dad's not home with the Daily Mail
And I want to read Rupert The Bear.

Bobby, off to bed, you can read
Rupert tomorrow.

But Mom, the hand will get me,
It does every night.

Oh don't be silly; it's only a dream.

No Mom. it's not, it's real,
It's really real.
It creeps up my legs
And up my belly.
And Mom, I can't shout you.

Mom, don't leave me till I'm asleep.

She doesn't.

But the hand still comes.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Nightmares

Time for bed our Bobby.

But Mom. not yet, it's only six o'clock.

Come along now, school tomorrow.

Mom, please, please
It really is only six o'clock,
And Dad's not home with the Daily Mail
And I want to read Rupert The Bear.

Bobby, off to bed, you can read
Rupert tomorrow.

But Mom, the hand will get me,
It does every night.

Oh don't be silly; it's only a dream.

No Mom. it's not, it's real,
It's really real.
It creeps up my legs
And up my belly.
And Mom, I can't shout you.

Mom, don't leave me till I'm asleep.

She doesn't.

But the hand still comes.

okay
was that a poem if it was the rythmn wasn't very good and it sounded like you hade grammatical errors otherwise the poem is captivating it draws the readers attention and leaves them wanting more and thinking about what happened

very grabbing and vivid.....but this is just downright this is creeper.

Very good. It's something that really gets to me. It stands out from all the mostly-crap poetry I get from other people here in Yahoo!Answers.

I do not think that I make the grade to be a critic, but as a reader I enjoyed your poem very much.
Simple and powerful.