Can you rate this poem Plz?

Question:You deserve what you want
you have what you need
all I’m asking is
for you to just read

I don’t know what to say
it’s like my mind is ripped apart
my thoughts are speechless
what’s speaking is my heart

I claim to be a man of word
Yet what I did was so wrong
I said I’d be there anytime you need help
or a shoulder to cry on

I, however, failed to see,
busy and stressed, is what you are very much
you needed me to be understanding
happen this would not had I known such

a troubling time it has been
such a wave of problems came
sorry is hard to show
an apology just seems lame

no matter how hard I tried
I couldn’t get a hold of you
Upsetting like a dark ocean
my mind bared until I was blue

if my reasons seem like excuses
then think of them as lies
As long as you’re not mad
And not thinking of goodbyes

I want you to be happy
A price is forgiveness
Just let me do the least
and let me clean up my mess

(and can you suggest a name for poem)

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: You deserve what you want
you have what you need
all I’m asking is
for you to just read

I don’t know what to say
it’s like my mind is ripped apart
my thoughts are speechless
what’s speaking is my heart

I claim to be a man of word
Yet what I did was so wrong
I said I’d be there anytime you need help
or a shoulder to cry on

I, however, failed to see,
busy and stressed, is what you are very much
you needed me to be understanding
happen this would not had I known such

a troubling time it has been
such a wave of problems came
sorry is hard to show
an apology just seems lame

no matter how hard I tried
I couldn’t get a hold of you
Upsetting like a dark ocean
my mind bared until I was blue

if my reasons seem like excuses
then think of them as lies
As long as you’re not mad
And not thinking of goodbyes

I want you to be happy
A price is forgiveness
Just let me do the least
and let me clean up my mess

(and can you suggest a name for poem)

That's the best apology I've ever read.
You're friend must forgive you.
Seeing how you know what you did was wrong
and you simply want to be back in their life.

I like the poem exactly how it is.
I don't think you should change your ending.

It's very good. And you should call it, Simply Complicated.
think about it, You know exactly what happened and you want to fix it, so it would seem simple yet, this person it is written to may be hurt and might not forgive, so it's complicated.

Good luck, I hope everything works out.

thats long
good i guess!

its verry detailed and moving in a scale from 1-10 i give it a 15

title..........Second Chance.................

I think it is very good. I would call it Forgiveness

it is filled with emotion.
quite touching

- dark ocean -

when i rate poems , my scale is 1 to 5- 1 being the worst and 5 being the best and i give your poem a 4.5 aw heck i give you a 5. i could tell you are sorry and i liked how you described your feelings. Who ever your friend is, they should love it cause i did

It has had a lot of thought go into it, I think it is brill ! I guess a title could be, The price of hurt ! sounds good to me anyway. I think you have spoken straight from your heart and have a talent, I think you should write a lot more poems and If you choose me as your best answer write me one cheers ! or yeah good luck with your friend !

change the last section

I want you to be happy
please forget and forgive
lets unbreak the pieces
and the life that we live

its ok for a friend although the ocean part doesn't seem to go with the rest.....you might not have a future as a poet though

I usually don't like rhyming poems, but seeing as this is like an "apology letter" for your friend, it's pretty good :)
I hope you and your friend make up.

name of poem - ' time of forgiveness'

amendment i fell needed in the very last verse,

your need of happiness
the price is forgiveness
I've already do my best
now it's up to u to do the rest...

(gd luck)

i like the last line, it's noble, your willing to take credit for your mess up and willing to clean it up afterwords. i like the ending , don't change it , it fits the poem perfectly. i'd call it something simple like " cleansing "

Sorry, I can't find your name but this is a good apology poem. What about Your Price?

umm well overall i think the poem was like extremely good. But in the middle there was some problems. The ending wasnt to bad but then agai n ur not done.
"Let's Write a New Begining"/
or lets write a New Ending.
idk either one i think is good. Second Chances is to obvious you want someting that says something without sayin it