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Position:Home>Poetry> Help for the ending to this poem??Question:I Might Sit Here all Day… By: Carly Butler I might sit here all day… Watching the water sway, Letting my fears all drift away, Of all the days, this is the best, Watching the sun set from east to west. I might sit here all day… Watching the boats slowly sail, Going slower than a snail, Couples walking hand in hand, Toes slipping down the sand. I might sit here all day… Until the sun sets, I don’t have any regrets, I stay until the end of the world, dO you think it's good? please help w/ the end of it!! Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I Might Sit Here all Day… By: Carly Butler I might sit here all day… Watching the water sway, Letting my fears all drift away, Of all the days, this is the best, Watching the sun set from east to west. I might sit here all day… Watching the boats slowly sail, Going slower than a snail, Couples walking hand in hand, Toes slipping down the sand. I might sit here all day… Until the sun sets, I don’t have any regrets, I stay until the end of the world, dO you think it's good? please help w/ the end of it!! I don’t have any regrets > Without any regrets? You need a final line and it seems like this poem is said to a specific person or group or being. Ask yourself who is the poem for and/or who is it to. Than tell them why you stay, why you'll wait til the end of the world (or time, or light, or breathe). That'll give your poem it's stamp of being finished. Or just give it a one word ending that sums the whole message up. Are you waiting for hope, or love, or death, ect. ie. I stay until the end of the world, "Crying." or "Waiting for you." Its very good...but it doesnt flow that much. I dont know about an ending...but poems should be from your heart...not someone else's, so just write what you feel about the topic. I think it's lovely. :) As far as I ma concerned it sounds very complete. Wonderful Job! how about u end with" i might sit here all day" just finish it with what u started it with if that makes sense maybe say why you'll stay there until the end of the world But i really like this poem your really talented |