Will you Please Read my Poem?

Question:Divorce
A Divorce splits a Family apart
causes pain and Heartache.
You can scribble it in Art
As fast as you can
And everyone will know
That your heart is full of sorrow.

It is especially hard
for their children,
They feel like their soul has been lifted
from their body
As they miss them.

As they miss the old days,
the Vacations,
and Movie nights
Of everyone together
they've lost sight
of all good
Until someone
helps them back
to life.

this poem has been published in several books but what is your opinion?

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Divorce
A Divorce splits a Family apart
causes pain and Heartache.
You can scribble it in Art
As fast as you can
And everyone will know
That your heart is full of sorrow.

It is especially hard
for their children,
They feel like their soul has been lifted
from their body
As they miss them.

As they miss the old days,
the Vacations,
and Movie nights
Of everyone together
they've lost sight
of all good
Until someone
helps them back
to life.

this poem has been published in several books but what is your opinion?

It's not too bad actually. I normally trash the people who put poems on here but i quite like it. Well done

its sad but real

when you write a poem
make sure its good

dont jumble words together
you wont be understood

bragging and boasting
is a tad bit gay

even if you did get published
bragging is not okay

i doubt you've been published
i wouldn't buy the book

hell i woudn't read it
i regret giving this a look

i think it is sad and depressing

I don't think thats a poem, I think thats just an explanation of divorce and the affects of divorce. poems are suppose to rhyme and mean something at the end of the poem, this did nothing for me.

its a mystery
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Sounds sad. Doesn't sound like a poem though,.it doesn't rhyme.

it is sad but it is very true! a number of my family members have gone through divorces and the kids have the hardest time ever!good poem i loved it!

it's nice...it may be hard for the children, but they will grow up and go through relationships that won't work..they will understand...i honestly believe that you should ALWAYS be honest with your children..i think if my mother would have be honest with me. we would have a better relationship..but always tell your children the truth even if it hurts them..they will admire that about you. HONEST IN EVERY ASPECT!!! i can not stress it anymore! lol i brought that up because, sugarcaoting a divorce to your kids..is dishonest!

its alright. I'd give it 6/10. I'm being honest here so maybe you can improve upon it. Some of the words don't even rhyme. Sorry, i know you probably worked hard on it and don't want people to critisize you for it, but critic is your friend as they tell you your flaws so you can improve!!

This poem tells me much. It tells me that divorce is a very hard thing to go through. Most people not only affect themselves but if affects the children they have as well. There's also some emotional problems with divorce. Like a family getting split up.

So I for one would never want 2 get divorced.

The content is very true, but i don't like the style... I am not sure of the right english word... in german i would say that i am missing the right "Versma?" (metre?!?!?!).

A Divorce splits a Family apart
causes pain and Heartache.
(Nice Versma?!!)

As they miss the old days,
the Vacations,
and Movie nights
(baaaad Versma?...)

I hope you can understand what i am trying to say :)

It's not great but a lot of people can relate to it. It glitches on several places but is ok in the message part.

my hardon splits a Family apart
causes pain and babies.
You can scribble it and fart
As fast as dogs with rabies.
And everyone will mutter
That your sack is full of nut-butter.

It is especially tasty
for their children,
They feel like their soul has been pasted
from my jiz
As they wiz.

As they miss my kum-bucket,
the late night sex-romps,
and home movies
of everyone sleeping together

they need a shite
thats banginly good
Until some biznatch
helps them back
to drink my jiznatch. - proc and dean

I doubt that this poem had been published.

It needs more work.

itss sooo sad! its full of sorrow and heartache...
it doesnt even has a specific subject...
sorry for being rude

molly that's a bit harsh.

I don't think I believe that it's actually been published.

I can tell that it's sincere, but it's not very good. There is no meter, and you haven't really said anything profound. It doesn't read like a poem. You should have it follow the same rhythm throughout, and it's not doing that at all. And if you want it to rhyme, then it should rhyme throughout, and not whenever you can think of a convenient word.

its sadly true

It is a worthy piece; but I doubt it is a true poem. Poetry need not have rhyme, but it must have rhythm and this has very little of that.