A quickie- Thoughts?

Question:Morals let us see the light of day
When many a person has gone astray.
And thus, you hinted what life could be
When I was my worst enemy.
This in my eyes was plain to see,
But you-
You couldn't even see the good in me.

-swoosh

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Morals let us see the light of day
When many a person has gone astray.
And thus, you hinted what life could be
When I was my worst enemy.
This in my eyes was plain to see,
But you-
You couldn't even see the good in me.

-swoosh

I like the ideas, but this didn't click for me. Reasons?:
#1 The meter is stiff, there's no flow.
#2 The poem is filled with cliches: "the light of day," "gone astray," "I was my worst enemy," "plain to see."
#3 "thus" Federal law prohibits the use of stiffly pompous words such as "thus." Look at the back of your poetic license, you'll see. That cost you points.

I like it.
Very nice work:)

I like it. Whoever is giving thumbs down is just not a poet.

Thoughts on morals? I will pass. Thoughts on your poem, very nice. My only suggestion would be to try to use another word or phrase for moral. But that is just me.