Do you like my poem ?

Question:Thundering clouds, ponder their moments
dancing merrirly,speed along these azure
tinted skies, are you looking for a ride ?,
gaze for a moment, as magic unfolds
rolling along the seven wonders of earths
paradise,
riding in the back seat of my blue sky,
bring along some shelter & rain clouds too
we may end up in New York City or
London or skylight Paris ?

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Thundering clouds, ponder their moments
dancing merrirly,speed along these azure
tinted skies, are you looking for a ride ?,
gaze for a moment, as magic unfolds
rolling along the seven wonders of earths
paradise,
riding in the back seat of my blue sky,
bring along some shelter & rain clouds too
we may end up in New York City or
London or skylight Paris ?

I likes it, but you never spread it out like so it's read to the full meaning, try this! :)

Thundering clouds,
ponder their moments dancing merrirly,
speed along these azure tinted skies,
are you looking for a ride?
gaze for a moment, as magic unfolds
rolling along the seven wonders of earths paradise,
riding in the back seat of my blue sky,
bring along some shelter & rain clouds too,
we may end up in New York City or London or skylight Paris ?

I only fixed where the question mark is above, but othere then that small problem and the way it is written out, you did an awsome job on this poem!!

I give it an 8 and i hope you write more if it's your passion!!

Have an awsome day!!! :)

its got potencial but it just seems like it needs something!!!

It's good, but there's still room for improvement. But, at the end of the day, I'm no expert.

It's ok :)

no, the phrasing is all wrong, and i don't like the tangent

Hey! It's one of the few poems I actually "get"!!!!

Nice job! I like it a lot! You are very talented!

I've always had a thing for clouds, anyway. I think they are so interesting. I love the way you communicate that clouds are worldwide travelers worth envying.

its an alright concept but it's a bit rough.
the "do you need a ride?" part is just way off, get rid of it plz. the fact that you use dancing and then you just start talking about a car and wonders - it just doesn't fit.
the first two lines of the poem are graceful and flowing but then it descends to a meaningless jumble of words which could probably have been written by a 7 year old for their english assignment.
lol, sorry. being honest.

It's beautiful and the personification of storm clouds is cute and light hearted.

Lol. It's got me imagining one of my cousins driving an old cadilac in the sky with rain clouds and white clouds riding along chilling out lol.

Yes it does have potential but perhaps you should look at "tidying" it up a bit...in terms of punctuation and such yucky but necessary trifles.

It has a cosmic sort of tone at the beginning but it ends up being so mundane...

I would like to see what other poems you have written, nevertheless.

I like your the meaning of your poem and the words used. However, try to choose words that seemingly rhymes so it may sound better and have the good character of a poem. You have this talent and keep going.

Thanks for sharing. Have a good day!