Critic this poem plz?

Question:Little baby in your cradle lying,
Your tiny hands trying to catch the sky.
Next to you sitting I hear you cry,
But for what reason are you crying?

Are you trying to tell me something with your babbling?
Are you anxious to know what your future will be?
I am sorry; I can’t tell you a thing.
I am as clueless as you of what will come to see.

Some say that you’re born either good or bad,
That it is in your genes, nothing more to add.
If it is true then what have you behind these eyes?
Are you really a wingless cherub or a devil in disguise?

Some say that like your parents you’ll become,
If they’re trash then you’ll be scum.
If it is true then it would certainly be odd,
Wouldn’t we all be Apple thieves in the gardens of god?

Some say that your destiny is all written,
In some book in heavens hidden.
If it is true then would you live your age,
If you knew what will happen in the last page?

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Little baby in your cradle lying,
Your tiny hands trying to catch the sky.
Next to you sitting I hear you cry,
But for what reason are you crying?

Are you trying to tell me something with your babbling?
Are you anxious to know what your future will be?
I am sorry; I can’t tell you a thing.
I am as clueless as you of what will come to see.

Some say that you’re born either good or bad,
That it is in your genes, nothing more to add.
If it is true then what have you behind these eyes?
Are you really a wingless cherub or a devil in disguise?

Some say that like your parents you’ll become,
If they’re trash then you’ll be scum.
If it is true then it would certainly be odd,
Wouldn’t we all be Apple thieves in the gardens of god?

Some say that your destiny is all written,
In some book in heavens hidden.
If it is true then would you live your age,
If you knew what will happen in the last page?

abba,abab,aabb,aabb,aabb: Your rhyme scheme changes a little, I didn't know if you ment to do that...
I like it though, your making a good point. It's nicely written, too. Keep up the good work!
I like this part:
"Some say that like your parents you’ll become,
If they’re trash then you’ll be scum.
If it is true then it would certainly be odd,
Wouldn’t we all be Apple thieves in the gardens of god?"
I don't know why, but I do... but the whole poem's pretty awesome. :)

2 thumbs up

Thats REALLY GOOD!

It is a bit long,but it is a really good poem.I like the curiousity and the wanting to understand.What a great thought of what a life would or could be.

becuas he cant catch anything