Is this poem good or not?

Question:Death looked me in the eye once
And he asked me what makes you different from all the rest in the world
At first I didn't respond I didn't know how to answer his question
He asked again what makes you different from all the rest
I opened my mouth to speak
But he raised his hand for silence and he had it
What makes you different from all the rest is that you are happy to see me
Death looked me in the eye once and I grined

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Death looked me in the eye once
And he asked me what makes you different from all the rest in the world
At first I didn't respond I didn't know how to answer his question
He asked again what makes you different from all the rest
I opened my mouth to speak
But he raised his hand for silence and he had it
What makes you different from all the rest is that you are happy to see me
Death looked me in the eye once and I grined

It needs some editing. the second line has too many words,
I'd cut the and & the all
don't forget the talking marks and the ?, death is asking you a question.
also I'd cut "his question" and make that line: "at first i didn't know how to answer". It flows a bit better.
and grinned has two ns.
You need to watch your grammar. Grammar points create the pauses in the sentences and make it clearer.

I like the poem, it made me grin lol.

thats is good to me people like people if they do these type of things

I think it has a great message and is very well written; however, it sounds a little long-winded, more like a paragraph.

Did you write it? Keep up the great work! I love good poetry, I wish I could write it.

I did not like the poem but Jo is right in her points. Seems that after being looked into the eye that something needed to be in place for a second line to show a puzzled death... after all he is wondering why you are different.

I really liked it.

Keep up the good work!

I like the message of the poem, but not the sound. So much of poetry is about how it sounds when you say it out loud. That's why old poets used complicated meters and rhyme schemes. I'm not saying that the poem needs to be completely and totally changed, but it does read more like prose. I think it would be better if you trimmed it down. Really hunt for extra words. I like the message though, it's an excellent start.

It's a strong poem!