Ugh..... major writers block!!!!!?

Question:you're fading away,
and almost gone.
you're out on the fray,
but i'm still holding on.
i can't see through my tears,
i can't hear through my fears.
because, you're still fading away,
and i'm still holding on.
the scenery changes to gray,
my thinking's foregone.

this is a song i'm writing and i'm trying to use more metaphors, and stuff. if there's any way you could help, i'd really appreciate it! thanks. :)

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: you're fading away,
and almost gone.
you're out on the fray,
but i'm still holding on.
i can't see through my tears,
i can't hear through my fears.
because, you're still fading away,
and i'm still holding on.
the scenery changes to gray,
my thinking's foregone.

this is a song i'm writing and i'm trying to use more metaphors, and stuff. if there's any way you could help, i'd really appreciate it! thanks. :)

oooooo......I'm kinda stuck too. But i got a few lines.
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I'm lost in a could of confusion and questions,
I'm shocked, i don't how to act or what to say.
This is not close to any of my intentions,
Just please don't let go today.

could you tell me what it is about? a person leaving you? you leaving them? I am a good writer and i would be happy to help!!

Sounds to me you lost someone dear to you.And you don't want to let them go so you will never forget them.I would end it with a sweet goodbye.A very good poem.

maybe change to can't hear through my tears and I can't see through my fears. I like! dont change. Write it down keep it in your pocket or backpack for a day or two...forget about it, then reread it. Luck, peace and joy!