Do you like my new Mars poem?

Question:BREAKING NEWS: NASA releases video of an avalanche on Mars.

NOW, we've done it!

We've caused an avalanche on Mars,
I warned of doom, my friends,
if you should bring your fuel-hyped cars
to serve your selfish ends.

I told you we should stick with Rover
to ride from dome to dome,
now, our troubles aren't over
we're wrecking our new home.

We came to write and sing our songs,
to give this planet birth,
we hoped to right our ancient wrongs,
repent our rape of Earth.

Our dreams will fade into the night
if we refuse to learn
that life on Mars is not a right
but a privilege we must earn!

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: BREAKING NEWS: NASA releases video of an avalanche on Mars.

NOW, we've done it!

We've caused an avalanche on Mars,
I warned of doom, my friends,
if you should bring your fuel-hyped cars
to serve your selfish ends.

I told you we should stick with Rover
to ride from dome to dome,
now, our troubles aren't over
we're wrecking our new home.

We came to write and sing our songs,
to give this planet birth,
we hoped to right our ancient wrongs,
repent our rape of Earth.

Our dreams will fade into the night
if we refuse to learn
that life on Mars is not a right
but a privilege we must earn!

That's great. You write the best Mar's poems. You should submit it on the poetsofmars.com along with your other ones :) The poem as a whole is great, but those last two stanzas are awesome.

Wow, that was really good, I liked it =)

i like it

That was really good

Goodjob!

It's pretty good, but who am I to say anything cuz i suck at school excpet for math. I rule at that

The poem tells a real good story!!!!!!!!!!:)

Did you really write that yourself? That was really really good. I am going to share this with some people. Thank you.

Very good and well written.

I like it!

Agreed!