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Question:Angie My dear

You are my long lost love of my curious fate, like seasons we hibernate and awake in the spring. The animosity I retain from Prolonged stillness, I only want everything to cultivate into something radiant. These Seasons come and I only wish the spring may never leave, as our love like a beautiful rose wilting to the near sensation of this arctic shadow. As tepid Things may be……Angie My Dear… I Love you
Angel Erivez Jr

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Angie My dear

You are my long lost love of my curious fate, like seasons we hibernate and awake in the spring. The animosity I retain from Prolonged stillness, I only want everything to cultivate into something radiant. These Seasons come and I only wish the spring may never leave, as our love like a beautiful rose wilting to the near sensation of this arctic shadow. As tepid Things may be……Angie My Dear… I Love you
Angel Erivez Jr

if u didn't say that it was a poem, i would have thought that it was like a love letter or writing about a crush. howeves, it is a very great poems. u might be a famous poet one day. keep it up!!!

It sounds more like a love letter to me.
Nice work:)

It's a good poem. It's just needing a meter change and I've been told how to change the meter on my own poetry. So I've got to thinking and come up with how to change the meter.
It reads like a letter more then a poem really. I think you have some good ideas going here so just work with it.

good poem

Some of the words do not go good together as in the line when u used radiant. when u used that word it seemed to go off the flow of the poem. Nvm. .....just that 1 i thought there was anotherone. It's a great poem.

I would give it a 8.5 or 9 out of 10.

very good

Try to first put the words into lines and stanzas. Then work on your word choices. Hibernate is only associated with winter, not seasons. Animosity is hatred against someone. I do not know what you mean by curious fate. An example with some editing:

You, my long lost love, my fate
apart we've been, asleep
stillness tears at me, unrelenting
your radiance, so far away

Work on it and have people help you edit. I am sure she will be pleased with the end result. P.S. do not forget the white rose!

Right now it's prose, poetry, even free form, has some sort of structure to divide it from prose. If not, my response to you could be classed as poetry.

Additionally, random capitalization doesn't lend anything to poetry. Capitalize items that should be capitalized, proper names, or emotions and places you are making characters in your work.

Lastly, ellipses are " . . ." only. adding additional dots does not indicate a longer pause, only a lack of knowledge on how to use an ellipse.