Is my poem good? new i am 11?

Question:"am i in love with you ??" a question i ask myself everyday
we were lovers but you fell for another girl
every time i ask for you to take me back or forgive me all u do is keep rejecting
and every time u reject i fall in love with a guy
1,2,3,4,5 rejections, five guys
each guy is special in their own way
1 st guy funny
2nd guy nice eyes
3rd guy cuteness
4th guy not sure
5th guy is you but you have every single thing in each guy
and that is why i ask such a question,
" am i in love with you?"

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: "am i in love with you ??" a question i ask myself everyday
we were lovers but you fell for another girl
every time i ask for you to take me back or forgive me all u do is keep rejecting
and every time u reject i fall in love with a guy
1,2,3,4,5 rejections, five guys
each guy is special in their own way
1 st guy funny
2nd guy nice eyes
3rd guy cuteness
4th guy not sure
5th guy is you but you have every single thing in each guy
and that is why i ask such a question,
" am i in love with you?"

That was adorable, so creative from such a young girl.
I'm 15 and I wrote poems like yours when I was 11. Continue writing poems, this one was beautiful and I hope you keep writing love poems such as this one and keep posting.
Thank you for sharing that lovely poem.
=)

uh..

keep on truckin', gurl.

It's goodish. it could be better. but you're only 11 so that will change.

its not bad because i understand what you are getting at but it doesnt really have a poetic appeal i think you shouldnt be too blunt about getting your point accross
but great emotion

your on the right track. sounds like you are confused sweetie. good way to figure it out through words. keep on writing. hope you get the guy iam thinking this is from personal experience.
i hope you are not really enyones lover though in real life.

You are 11, and writing this!!!

You need to take up some good books and read them, Narnia for istance. This stuff coming from an 11 year old is pathetic. 11 year olds falling in love with one guy after another is obnoxious. On you part, can you explain what love is? Or rather, do you understand the difference between love, infatuation and friendship.

Its ridiculous, to say the least.

TW K

Time will make you better at this.

I, neither mean to be harsh, nor do I want to discourage you, but at 11 years old there is no possible way you can understand what it is to fall in love or to be anyone's lover and if you do know what it is to be a 'lover' then all I can say is... That's just wrong. My suggestion is that you write about what you know. Write about things you like, things you don't like, about crushes, or your best friend. Just write something you've actually experienced. I'm not sure if you've heard the phrase before, but it's very popular because it is the best advice for a writer. "Write what you know". Good Luck and keep writing.

Get off Yahoo, you're too young, girl...and the poem is too typical and ordinary, I'm sorry.

"ask for you to take me back" == suggest you love yourself first, babe. Autonomy is power. You don't need anyone in your life to validate you.

Eleven is entirely too young to be bothering with this type of blather. And the poem seemed more like whining to me.

Your 11 and writing about boyfriends, woah there. Anyways, it was cute and your only 11 so you will keep on improving. Try another poem that rhymes, no poems don't have to rhyme but it pulls them together a little more.