suggestions for this one?

Question:See her weeping in the night
Watch him as he strikes a light
See the ones who hide away
Too scared to face another day

Now lift the veil that makes you blind
Open eyes to your own kind
Look beyond the outward smiles
See their lives: it's worth your while

There is pain here, at their core
Still their wounds are always sore
Alone, they'll never let it be
Alone, they'll not again be free

Will you help them heal again?
Will you admit you see their pain?
Help them see light: be one who gives
Lend them love to let them live.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: See her weeping in the night
Watch him as he strikes a light
See the ones who hide away
Too scared to face another day

Now lift the veil that makes you blind
Open eyes to your own kind
Look beyond the outward smiles
See their lives: it's worth your while

There is pain here, at their core
Still their wounds are always sore
Alone, they'll never let it be
Alone, they'll not again be free

Will you help them heal again?
Will you admit you see their pain?
Help them see light: be one who gives
Lend them love to let them live.

A clear message here, well-expressed.
I'm not 100% sure about those short lines though. Such a format is in danger of trivialising the serious and worthwhile content.

Inspiring. Stop your moaping and help those who are truly less fortunate than yourself!

This is a well-constructed poem with great rhyming and rhythm, an inspiring message and bittersweet theme. I think it's wonderful the way it is. Thank you.

Inspiring keep up the good work In writing them as I am also a poem writer and have been doing It for over 10 years

one of the better ones Ive read so far pity it wasn't your own work copy rewrite all the same someone Else's work and not yours