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We hear a cry into the night,
a cry of pain, a cry of fright.
Soon we see little girl,
with a bloody dress and a flattened curls
a tear rolls down her precious cheek,
Dead is the girl so small and weak.
Hide the paing, you think it's fun,
nothin left to be done.,
Her lifes been taken far away
a little girl died today


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We hear a cry into the night,
a cry of pain, a cry of fright.
Soon we see little girl,
with a bloody dress and a flattened curls
a tear rolls down her precious cheek,
Dead is the girl so small and weak.
Hide the paing, you think it's fun,
nothin left to be done.,
Her lifes been taken far away
a little girl died today

Rhyme scheme: a,a,b,b,c,c,d,d,e,e.
As for the base meter: da-DUM, da-DUM, da-DUM, da-DUM,/ da-DUM, da-DUM, da-DUM, da-DUM,/ DUM-da-Dum-Dum-da-DUM - take it from there, unstressed da, stressed DUM.

WOW! Your poem gave me the chills. It's a really good poem and you should spank your boyfriend for not being there to help you. Sorry I couldn't give you the right answers to your question.

They are iambic tetrameter couplets (AA BB CC ....).
There are deficient lines (a syllable missing) at 3, 7, 8, 10 and a line which is (at least) a syllable over at 4.
The piece is not particularly successful. There are serious errors of metre, tone, register, expression and idiom. It would make more sense if you practised analysis on real poetry.

The meter starts out iambic tetrameter, 4 iambs per line, but changes to different meters all throughout. The rhyme scheme is couplet, aabbccdd ect.
3rd line 3 iambs
4th line 4 iambs and a trocha
5th line 4 iambs
6th line 4 iambs
7th line 2 iambs 1 3 syllable unit.
8th line, 2 3 syllable units
9th line 4 iambs
10th line 2 iambs 1 3syllable unit
An iamb is 2 syllables with the accent on the second syllable
A trocha is 2 syllables with the accent on the first syllable
The 3 syllable unit name slips my mind at the moment, and my reference site is down, but the one you use has the accent on the first and third syllables.