Poem - A Man And A Woman - do you like?

Question:A man and a woman
There is much to offer
Unconditional love
Unlike any other

The sun awaits a sign
Ready to beam yellow
Wanting to warm a pair
Extra for the fellow

A song needs to be heard
Perhaps a cello's call
Strings unbind a sadness
Commanding ache's downfall

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: A man and a woman
There is much to offer
Unconditional love
Unlike any other

The sun awaits a sign
Ready to beam yellow
Wanting to warm a pair
Extra for the fellow

A song needs to be heard
Perhaps a cello's call
Strings unbind a sadness
Commanding ache's downfall

it is a pleasant poem to read.pictorially, like the 3rd stanza and how the sound music is combined with emotion.that is a nice touch.
Take care,,

Don't give up your day job

it's beautiful

It's not bad, not really my taste though.

the poem is good

wow did you make dat up?
its beautiful!!

The only one that really relates is the first stanza (to the title)
change your title, or make it connect more somehow
other than that- its pretty darn good

erm........thats was....so...........stupi.......GREAT I GUESS HELP ME OUT PLZ ON MY SOURCE

i really like the 2 second stanzas...the first one i think is a bit too literal, so if you rearrange/revise that, i think it would be perfect

Honesty?
I think its great..but not WOW. You know what i mean? And im not one to be mean..because its probally a-lot better than mine =]. I just think with a little more feeling.....it could be WOW WOW. =] So dont give up it's almost there.....when you write a new one...let me know so i can read it..cause i think your really good..and almost there. =]
Dont give up.

your title only refers to the first line...the poem is nice...havent i seen you around before? was you that DP had written a poem for?

nice! its really nice

Great, I like it. Sorry for the delay but just got home and Fat Cat need love before anything else. There is one word; (wanting to warm a pair) or (wanting to warm the pair). But it is your world.

Not at all...so sorry!

Is it a love so unconditionally beautiful that it is "ache's downfall"? That is what i hear. The music is counterpoint to the love of the man and the woman. The poem is really lovely. Thank you.

I like it, it is beautiful yet sad to me at the same time.
Your wording in the third stanza is perfect and ends the poem beautifully.
Keep writing, your work has evolved remarkably.
(((Marguerite)))