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Question:The stanza before it is
The Special Someone,
You know you can trust
Your one true love
Not a whirlwind of lust

Now the next stanza says
the big bad world
shielding the one
The chance to discover
Life has just begun

Now I think I need another way of saying 'big bad world', and without sounding kiddie-ish. Also, I need to rework 'shielding the one', to decsribe perhaps finding my one true love. But I don't know what to replace these lines with?
Please give any suggestions!


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: The stanza before it is
The Special Someone,
You know you can trust
Your one true love
Not a whirlwind of lust

Now the next stanza says
the big bad world
shielding the one
The chance to discover
Life has just begun

Now I think I need another way of saying 'big bad world', and without sounding kiddie-ish. Also, I need to rework 'shielding the one', to decsribe perhaps finding my one true love. But I don't know what to replace these lines with?
Please give any suggestions!

He patiently waits
My wonderful one
Our chance to discover
Life has just begun

Or something of that order? Maybe that will give you a jump start to get you going. Good luck!