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Position:Home>Poetry> I need help on the last verse of my poem, please?Question:The verse goes. Love is like luck So if you search far You'll find what you seek 'You'll get your superstar. I think 'superstar' is so cliche, and kiddie like. I need a more grown up verse to end it all, but it has to rhyme with 'far'. Sorry, but this is a rhyming poem. (arrgghh) Thanks for any suggestions. Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: The verse goes. Love is like luck So if you search far You'll find what you seek 'You'll get your superstar. I think 'superstar' is so cliche, and kiddie like. I need a more grown up verse to end it all, but it has to rhyme with 'far'. Sorry, but this is a rhyming poem. (arrgghh) Thanks for any suggestions. Love is like luck And if you search far You'll find what you seek Look into your heart. Sorry I couldn't just change the last word.......I felt the whole line needed changing. Star I use this alot for when im writing poems when i need rhyming words. http://www.rhymezone.com/ "like a song played by guitar" how is that??? :-) how about: and hit the triple bar or: So if you search far just like in slots you'll hit the triple bar I'm sorry , too , but none of it has rhythm : your 1st line has 4 syllables , your 2nd has 5 ; the 3rd again has 5 , while the 4th has 6 ! Rhyming is not only about similar-ending last words ..... Incidentally , do you find luck if you seek it ? Rythm in heart |