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Position:Home>Poetry> Is my Poem any good??Question:I am the girl that you walk right by, Pay no attention to me, For I am constantly misjudged… I am the girl that sits in the back fof the classroom, Keeping her opinions to herself, Afraid to let anyone know she is there… I am the girl that will fight, For her own beliefs, And for her friends. I am the girl that will let her dreams, Just slip away in fear, That she will fail… I am the girl that screams silently, Cries where no one can see, Lets no one in… I am the girl that you never see, You never hear, You never got to understand, You never knew… I am the girl that you could have saved… I am the girl that is forever lost. Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I am the girl that you walk right by, Pay no attention to me, For I am constantly misjudged… I am the girl that sits in the back fof the classroom, Keeping her opinions to herself, Afraid to let anyone know she is there… I am the girl that will fight, For her own beliefs, And for her friends. I am the girl that will let her dreams, Just slip away in fear, That she will fail… I am the girl that screams silently, Cries where no one can see, Lets no one in… I am the girl that you never see, You never hear, You never got to understand, You never knew… I am the girl that you could have saved… I am the girl that is forever lost. i really like this poem, it kinda of reminds me of myself all the way. Two Words: LOVED IT! whoa. A++++++++++++++ bravo!! I think some of it could use a little bit of work, like some filling in or something... but I really like the poem, it's really good. I like it. I could picture it right away. You aren't repetitive to an intolerable amount and the times that you do repeat slight parts it is worked in the right way. It has transitions and fluency and imagery and figurative language, you are good for now. Don't stop now though, you could probably add more to it somehow or just go on to write about something else on another poem. If you wrote that, you have a talent for it and can probably write more that is equally good. I would never say anything bad about anyones poem, because it's your expression and it can never be wrong, it's just a matter of style. But I do have to honestly say I loved it. Sounds like a I'm go to kill my self letter!!! You really need to talk to some one about your issues. From writing Poetry myself you write it from your heart and personal Experience and your most hidden emotions I loved it. I hope that you use poetry as a way to help express your self. Because I would like to see more of your poems |