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Question:no bad lanuage plz

my dear my heart beats like a humming bird when you are near. Your vocie is music to my ear. With you there is nothing to fear. you hold me in your arms. you keep me safe form harms way. love me i shall be yours some day. and come back to me when you go i away i shall wait for you every day of my life. i shall wait for you every day i am your wife. my sweet dear.
probly not one of my best one's but hopefully it's still good

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: no bad lanuage plz

my dear my heart beats like a humming bird when you are near. Your vocie is music to my ear. With you there is nothing to fear. you hold me in your arms. you keep me safe form harms way. love me i shall be yours some day. and come back to me when you go i away i shall wait for you every day of my life. i shall wait for you every day i am your wife. my sweet dear.
probly not one of my best one's but hopefully it's still good

The shifting rhymes were interesting.

note typos: vocie (voice), form (from), go i away i (one too many i's I think).

this isnt bad at all