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Question:She screams, "take a bite"
As she sits so juicy on the table
So round
So crisp
So firm
I hold her gently in my hand
A handful is just enough
As I take her into my mouth
I thnk to myself,
"Apples are a delicious fruit."

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: She screams, "take a bite"
As she sits so juicy on the table
So round
So crisp
So firm
I hold her gently in my hand
A handful is just enough
As I take her into my mouth
I thnk to myself,
"Apples are a delicious fruit."

Well... It's no banana!!

Just kidding. I loved your version!! Thanks for taking me up on the challenge... Adam... This was juicy!!

*she smiles*

Temari

...very good, "Adam"...quite good...actually

I like it. Very describe . Short and to the point. try and write some more.

I love apples.

You need to leave that poor Applebee's apple alone! :D

"Get it together, baby!"

I enjoyed your poem!

And to think I thought it was a nectarine! Damn apples, been leading men down the wrong road since Adam & Eve!

That is atually good. I must admit it is not the adult poems i usally read, but that is quite good.

OMG! you naughty boy,
HAHAHA! really good and hillarious

Apple booty?

This is pretty good. One suggestion though, maybe take out "to myself," in the next to last line it's a bit unnecessary.

Very appealing....and sweeeeeet!!!
(so is 3000 points yee har!)

lol, is this suppose to be a sexual poem, because that's how i'm looking at it. i think you did an "okay" job though