Hows this for a love poem (its short)?

Question:it burned through the night
the gentle glow
of pure loves light

the warmth of love
the gentle touch
the meaningful stare
more than enough

loves light it shines
even in horrid times
its shone in thine
when i close my eyes

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: it burned through the night
the gentle glow
of pure loves light

the warmth of love
the gentle touch
the meaningful stare
more than enough

loves light it shines
even in horrid times
its shone in thine
when i close my eyes

Oh! It's so sweet!!! Whoever receives this will be so happy! I'd like to receive something like this myself!

Sicerely,
Jessie B.

Its pretty good,
the first stanza needs to have four lines though cos otherwise it doesn't flow.

good stuff.

its nice
short &
happening

'pretty good, needs a few punctuation marks, though, but truly wonderful. nice unity.

Not to short but instead of warmth put "The Hemroids of love"

i like the first two verses, but the last sounds a bit....odd? Not sure if it fits. Still, cool!

I am the most unromantic man on the planet....personly I'd prefer my man to bring home a six pack...is that wrong? lol