Love Kamikaze -- (let me know what you think people)?

Question:This one isn't too cryptic. This one was wrote blindly at the spur of the moment, so I hope it isn't too bad... Enjoy. Or not. It's your choice.

I looked at your picture and cried today.
With just a few words you took my life away.
I would do anything just to hear you say,
"I love you too, baby, and I'm here to stay."

Nobody knows the pain that I would go through,
Just so I could briefly put my arms around you.
I love you more than anything and you know it's true.
Is it wrong for me to wish that I know what to do?

Please, please, baby, don't let it end like this.
There's no good reason, I will really miss
All the love we had and every single kiss.
Baby, you always put me in a state of bliss.

I wish for you back as tears fall from my eye.
You're the only woman I want in my life until I die.
Helpless and confused I think of us and cry.
I sit all alone and only wonder why.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: This one isn't too cryptic. This one was wrote blindly at the spur of the moment, so I hope it isn't too bad... Enjoy. Or not. It's your choice.

I looked at your picture and cried today.
With just a few words you took my life away.
I would do anything just to hear you say,
"I love you too, baby, and I'm here to stay."

Nobody knows the pain that I would go through,
Just so I could briefly put my arms around you.
I love you more than anything and you know it's true.
Is it wrong for me to wish that I know what to do?

Please, please, baby, don't let it end like this.
There's no good reason, I will really miss
All the love we had and every single kiss.
Baby, you always put me in a state of bliss.

I wish for you back as tears fall from my eye.
You're the only woman I want in my life until I die.
Helpless and confused I think of us and cry.
I sit all alone and only wonder why.

She should take you back after reading this one. Nice work. If this doesn't work, offer her an apple.

awesome! it truly is lovely!

Thats how u do it! Give that 2 the right girl and she'll melt.

yeah you should make this into a mix or screamo and acoustic as a song

awww, that is really sweet! i think you showed how vulnerable you were, and how much heartache you were... are feeling. that is a beautiful poem, and it's nice to see guys feel. I'm kidding, but truly, it is sweet. she should be ashamed. and you should be proud to have such heart and talent. --Sarah--

I think this would work really well if put to music. I could almost hear someone singing it in my head.