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Question:Now i lay down to sleep 'i lay here thinking of all the lies you keep.
I once gave you my heart so deep' and now your nothing more than a creep.
Now i;ll take your heart and soul' as you taught me this long ago..
Now these lonely days are here' and i realize this is much more that just all my fear.
As i lay alone and cry i am wondering ' should i live ' or should i die.
Now i hear you creeping in ' smelling of sex and drinks of gin.

While i;m laying here next to you ' should i get the gun and die with you .
Now it's over i must say ; why did you have to break my heart a million different ways.
Now i sit in my cell for life and ' never had the chance' to be a good wife..

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Now i lay down to sleep 'i lay here thinking of all the lies you keep.
I once gave you my heart so deep' and now your nothing more than a creep.
Now i;ll take your heart and soul' as you taught me this long ago..
Now these lonely days are here' and i realize this is much more that just all my fear.
As i lay alone and cry i am wondering ' should i live ' or should i die.
Now i hear you creeping in ' smelling of sex and drinks of gin.

While i;m laying here next to you ' should i get the gun and die with you .
Now it's over i must say ; why did you have to break my heart a million different ways.
Now i sit in my cell for life and ' never had the chance' to be a good wife..

wow cami that was really good and dark
the view of a messed up women
i really like
BUT
i will never sleep next to you not with that gunn there lol

That is really good,
sounds like someone needs a divorce instead of a murder sentence tho

Wow, it's great. I just hope you're not thinking along these lines.

sorry....but....no...just...no

its not bad. just be careful how u fit all those sylllables in a sentence. like the first sentence "i lay here thinking of all the lies you keep", its very wordy. pick words that sum up a group of words. u already menti0oned that ur laying. no need to repeat. the first line should read, "now i lay down to sleep, thinking of all the lies you keep." it flows better. go ahead and use that if u like it. if u want more suggestions, email me and ill be more than glad to help.

What can I say Cami what a great piece of work. Keep it up.

I hope it's fiction. I could feel your pain.
Nice job at expressing yourself, or the scene.

That is very touching.

No man is worth going to prison for, and not worth dying over.
Leave him and start a divorce procedure.

Very potent. You get better and better before my eyes.

you don't happen to be my ex-wife, are you? lol. great poem, a little , how shall we say, edgy?

the embers have finally died,
you wonder why you cried.

Very deep poem. I never understand how a man could come home smelling of sex and cheap booze and not have his wife kill him. Excellent piece of work. One of your best.