Is my poem contest material, can you please critique?

Question:I know its not great but I just wrote it, and it's only a rough copy.
So what do you think?
Thanx in advance! =]

Things don’t truly get easier with time
Like people always seem to claim
Because she still can’t get you off her mind
And it’s been a year of heartache and pain

As everyday comes and goes
She misses you more, yet know one knows
They see this girl with not a tear in her eyes
Getting deceived, because at night she cries

When she looks at you, her heart breaks again
Replaying memories, remembering when
Wondering if you’ve forgotten her yet
She still hasn’t forgotten the day you two met

Knowing nothing ever lasts too long
She can’t help but wonder what went wrong
So na?ve too and never knowing
But still in love, though she’ll never show it

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I know its not great but I just wrote it, and it's only a rough copy.
So what do you think?
Thanx in advance! =]

Things don’t truly get easier with time
Like people always seem to claim
Because she still can’t get you off her mind
And it’s been a year of heartache and pain

As everyday comes and goes
She misses you more, yet know one knows
They see this girl with not a tear in her eyes
Getting deceived, because at night she cries

When she looks at you, her heart breaks again
Replaying memories, remembering when
Wondering if you’ve forgotten her yet
She still hasn’t forgotten the day you two met

Knowing nothing ever lasts too long
She can’t help but wonder what went wrong
So na?ve too and never knowing
But still in love, though she’ll never show it

I like it! It really shows the angst of love that goes wrong, especially that of a teenage, first love type of thing. That's what it reminds me of.

It's ok. Not contest material because it's too 'generic' in my opinion. It looks like about 90% of the poems I read when I was a copy editor in college. A simple poem about lost love, crying, heartbreak. It's just a bit too simple for a contest, but it's not bad.

There is a mistake in Line #6. Change "know" to "no" (no one knows...)

It's a very good poem. It depends what kind of contest you are entering. Honestly, it's a little "young" sounding...as in, aimed at teenagers. If it's that type of contest, then go for it!

its ok

get a life ? move on

Whilst it has no earth shattering qualities I would rate it as not bad but similar to a thousand others in that area. 2 mistakes though: know one knows, should be no one knows and getting deceived should be having been deceived (she is not getting deceived NOW--the deception was done in the past). Go on writing You have potential.