Would you be ever so kind as to comment on this poem(Good or bad always welcome,

Question:It's one click away
Between the white and the gray
May the Saints hear us pray
As night, taking flight, turns to day

A monitor screen
Is somewhere between
An altar and dreams
Full of litter, and glitter, that gleams!

The floodgate's always open
The seals now all broken
Captured image only token
That reach, for a speech, long since spoken

They come in a file
Bites by the mile
Obtained without guile
Some are nice, some are vice, some are vile

So whats it all for?
This digital door
That always brings more
to delete, in complete, shocking horror

The rambling conclusion
and strangest confusion
Or obscene illusion
Friend, will it end, this awful intrusion?

So, is it good or is it bad?
Is it a phase or a fad?
Does it make you happy or sad?
Or is it a given, that it's driven, the world utterly mad?

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: It's one click away
Between the white and the gray
May the Saints hear us pray
As night, taking flight, turns to day

A monitor screen
Is somewhere between
An altar and dreams
Full of litter, and glitter, that gleams!

The floodgate's always open
The seals now all broken
Captured image only token
That reach, for a speech, long since spoken

They come in a file
Bites by the mile
Obtained without guile
Some are nice, some are vice, some are vile

So whats it all for?
This digital door
That always brings more
to delete, in complete, shocking horror

The rambling conclusion
and strangest confusion
Or obscene illusion
Friend, will it end, this awful intrusion?

So, is it good or is it bad?
Is it a phase or a fad?
Does it make you happy or sad?
Or is it a given, that it's driven, the world utterly mad?

Yahoo is crazy
the keyboard is hot
no one agrees
on anyone's lot

We reach to the sky
we fall to the deep
Most of us here
Get little sleep

Where will this go
When will it end
Should we all regroup
Well now that
All depends.

I think I am done now
No more can I say
I like your poem
Have a Good day!

It sounds nice, a nice rhyme to it

its good

i like it, it's good, i have no idea how it makes me feel

Amateurish poetry is easily recognizable as more often than not the author forces rhymes, as in your case. If you're a serious student of poetry, may I suggest you study it so you don't fall into the trap of rhyme?

Its pretty good.

OMG that is so good! I totally knew what you were talking about and you painted a picture for me. Good work!

Good but try to stay on topic

Yeah I agree! I loved it, thought it had a really great flow and rhythm to it :)

Great job! The rhyming is WAY better than anything I could have come up with. Mine would be like.

Computers and stuff.
filled with... uh... fluff?
What do we do
about this... this... computer... shoe?

And the horror would end there because I'd be too lazy to write a poem.

For some reason I channeled Simon Cowell whilst reading this creatively written crap.
No rhythm, dear. I mean this genuinely...however, I DO marvel at your ability to rhyme.

Might I suggest a career as a rap-artist?

its cool! yours is cool too Mark

Awesome, I like the rhyme a lot.
Mark you have talent too.

You get a star for this!!