I wrote this song, tell me what you think!?

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Thanks,

Dear anyone who want's to read this!.
I've got so much to say,
but not enough words!.
I think I've finally reached my breaking point!.
Where I can no longer be saved!./

I'm reaching out my hand!.
Trying to hold onto something,
Something that won't let me down!.
But all I reach is air!./

I'm walking down this road,
This time all alone!.
So no one tells me where to go!.
I wish I could turn time around!./

Chorus/

Dear anyone who wants to read this,
I've got so much to say,
and now I've found the words!.
I have reached my breaking point,
My heart can no longer get broken,
only healed in time!.
But I can't do it on my own!.
I can no longer walk this path alone!.
So anyone, someone, help!.
Sincerely, me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Whether you really want to be commented upon regarding the quality of framing of lyrics!? I think you have tried to set out a message, that you walk alone in an endless path seeking love and care, that you have the lust to live, share and enjoy, but there is none that you can find at this moment, that despite your sincere, true and honest jesture, you are yet to be resiprocated, that stretching out your hands, all you feel is emptiness!.!.!.!.!.
If that is what you wanted to communicate, it is an intense appeal and a good effort!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I agree with Sara!. The chorus is almost exactly like the first verse, unless you are starting the song out with the chorus, which is odd!. also, if its a song you wouldn't be reading anything!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I feel as though it repeats it self a little too much!. I mean I can understand that songs repeat but there was nothing in the middle to seperate the two repeating parts, if you know what I mean!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Its pretty good!. Its hard to judge without the music though!.Www@QuestionHome@Com