Okay what do you guys think of this poem?

Question:Fighting Blind

hold me close
you are my ghost
my unholy fire
the anointment i require
to set my soul free
so i may be with thee
and burn in the darkest hole
with you my love, you have control
jaded are the kindest words of thought
when they are not being sought
but so hard to find
when i finally do make you mine
so dont waste your time
priming your malicious lies
my heart and soul are not yours to spare
so love me if you dare
love me if you should
hate me if you could
my life is an open book
mine eyes are a wondrous portrait of dreams
with colors and shades of every scheme
yet you choose to see me in black and white
which is why it fills me with dread and such fright
for with this love you deal in absolutes
and so your decisions are resolute
now here i am with this cloud of gray
off to ruin a sunny day
and bring a fresh torment of torture and rain
they wash and heal the wounds they intend to maim
yet this gruesome love i continue to claim
for it is my only conduit of refuge
no matter how shifty it may become or shrewd
it will always be there with its draining eyes
piercing a line through and into the back of my mind
where it will remain as a reminder of the time
i was beguiled by the darkness shrouded in the sublime
it would seem that i would leave all of this vexation behind
but i continue to waste my time fighting blind

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Fighting Blind

hold me close
you are my ghost
my unholy fire
the anointment i require
to set my soul free
so i may be with thee
and burn in the darkest hole
with you my love, you have control
jaded are the kindest words of thought
when they are not being sought
but so hard to find
when i finally do make you mine
so dont waste your time
priming your malicious lies
my heart and soul are not yours to spare
so love me if you dare
love me if you should
hate me if you could
my life is an open book
mine eyes are a wondrous portrait of dreams
with colors and shades of every scheme
yet you choose to see me in black and white
which is why it fills me with dread and such fright
for with this love you deal in absolutes
and so your decisions are resolute
now here i am with this cloud of gray
off to ruin a sunny day
and bring a fresh torment of torture and rain
they wash and heal the wounds they intend to maim
yet this gruesome love i continue to claim
for it is my only conduit of refuge
no matter how shifty it may become or shrewd
it will always be there with its draining eyes
piercing a line through and into the back of my mind
where it will remain as a reminder of the time
i was beguiled by the darkness shrouded in the sublime
it would seem that i would leave all of this vexation behind
but i continue to waste my time fighting blind

Well, for the entire first half of it, I was wondering if you were talking to God or Satan...

But it really is good. Keep it up!

beautiful poem
thanks for sharing mate!

I hate poems :)

YAAAY!

beautifulllll

did you write it? It's very good

its very good. i enjoyed it. very emotional.
xxxxxxx

its great! scale of 1 to 10 it gets a 9! amazing!(the only 10's in my book ar Shel Silverstein) amazing!

great poem did you write it. I'd give it a 101%

199% if you wrote it

it`s so good man keep going in writing

Generally, to me, it expresses a sense of Longing, Unrequited Longing.
However, there are some threatening overtones, which expresses 'A DANGER'.
Indicative of someone, on the edge of violent repercussions,
either to themselves or towards the intended subject.
Go and see a mate(friend), Preist, Rabbi, Monk or whatsoever. Tell them what's Driving you, and see what can arise from that.
I THINK, SOME HELP MAY BE A WISE MOVE.

well i cant say that its good since everyone else already said so
so....

I HATE IT

jus kidding
its very good