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This poem I made, is it good?

Your mausoleum is your home now, where you're sheltered form all evil,
But your life does not prevail here, here in this lifeless dream made real,
You stay hidden here in this room, never to awake to the sound of their cries,
though they cry so loud, you arn't able to hear them, you're lifeless bone.

You've melted away like cold winter snow, and you're no longer a lying corpse.
Your mangled body has disintegrated, along with the softness of the earth,
Your eyes were turned over and were gray inside your sockets, but they are no longer.
Your heart lies in what remains of your chest, but the love inside it died along with you.



And don't tell me i'm depressed. I wrote this when I was happy.THANKS!


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: This gave me the shivers!! I really like it. I'm no poetry expert but so what?? If it touched a chord in someone it's GOOD as far as I'm concerned and this touched a few chords with me. Thanks for sharing.