What do u think of this opening for 1st Chapter of story Im writing?

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What do u think of this opening for 1st Chapter of story Im writing?

Chapter 1

??Ben, I don??t like what I see.?? His wife said with her back towards him as she stood by the balcony doors that overlooked the city below. Her arms were loosely folded, and her raven black hair and the satin night dress that she was wearing billowed gently in the breeze that blew through the open doors of the balcony. Strangely there was an absence of the usual city ambience of whaling police sirens and traffic.

Feeling puzzled as to what she meant Ben slid out from under the magnolia coloured bed covers and went to join Sky.
??Honey, what are you talking about??? he said resting his hand over her back, instinctively stroking the silky creaminess of her night dress, he just wanted her to come back to bed. She looked at him with her dark and intense eyes, wearing an expression of anxiety. Ben slowly lifted his eyes up to the horizon of the city, the familiar cityscape of neon draped buildings was disturbed by a monstrous structure with a colouring as black as the

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the blackest night sky, it reflected no light. It was adorned by twisted spires and tendrils that reached into the purple stormy sky stabbing into the lower clouds. It??s symmetry was striking but this only served to emphasise its abstract unnaturalness and alieness.

Ben felt a hint of anxiety and fear welling up in his solar plexus just by setting his eyes on that thing, indeed it felt as if that ??thing?? was inducing these feelings inside him. He felt his pulse racing, he wanted to run but he was rooted to the spot. He reached out for Sky next to him but he just felt his arms slicing through thin air. He started to back off from the balcony.

Suddenly the sky started to light up building to an intensity of solid white light in the distance. This wall of white light started to move towards them at terrific speed, swallowing up everything that it enveloped tearing down buildings and float roads. A vortex inside the light was sweeping debris and everything into it like a

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a tornado. Ben felt air around him being dragged outside of the room towards the brilliant light. He found it hard to breathe as it was even sucking the air out of his lungs. And the fear, such fear as he never felt before when one feels the second before their life is extinguished??the light burning into his eyes, his skin-

Ben bolted up right in his bed, he was breathing hard and was cold from perspiration

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the blackest night sky, it reflected no light. It was adorned by twisted spires and tendrils that reached into the purple stormy sky stabbing into the lower clouds. It??s symmetry was striking but this only served to emphasise its abstract unnaturalness and alieness.

Ben felt a hint of anxiety and fear welling up in his solar plexus just by setting his eyes on that thing, indeed it felt as if that ??thing?? was inducing these feelings inside him. He felt his pulse racing, he wanted to run but he was rooted to the spot. He reached out for Sky next to him but he just felt his arms slicing through thin air. He started to back off from the balcony.

Suddenly the sky started to light up building to an intensity of solid white light in the distance. This wall of white light started to move towards them at terrific speed, swallowing up everything that it enveloped tearing down buildings and float roads. A vortex inside the light was sweeping debris and everything into it like a