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Do u think it is nice??

I wrote this poem ,but am not sure if it is good enough...so may I have ur opinion about it....thnx

Far Away

When your'e far away from me...
I think where the heck would you be
I look far and near...
I yell and call you, but your'e not here to hear
Then a little voice inside of me would say:..
Maybe your'e busy thinking of me, maybe your'e away
Then I start missing you before the ticking of the seconds...
While each second my love becomes greater and extends
Then after a lot of longing, hard days...
I start thinking where would you be for this whole phase
I start walking around, searching for you...
And there I find u, sitting, bored with nothing to do
Then i look at you, I stare in your eyes...
I remember your love, I think about your lies
Then i start wondering.."Was I good enough for him??...
I find no answer since my life became so diim
I go back alone, showing myself the way home...
I wait for a call, I wait for a ring on the phone
But apperently you forgot about me...
But apperently by your side I'll never dream to be
But no matter what, I will keep on loving you...
Besides the things you will or did do


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I'm sure that it's good enough...for us. It does have artistic and poetic building blocks. It's a little long, but okay. Yes, it's nice work. Keep going!