Please, Kindly Rate this for me. Thanks?

Question:

Please, Kindly Rate this for me. Thanks?

By 4mika 6/07

" I Am"

Certainly, without question, my head is spinning out of control.
Under-standing me, Under-lining you, Defining the truth as what
We chose it to be or not. ?? I am,

Slipping in and out of consciousness, just a thought
Of what could have been; had I not let things get this bad.
Many have come too question, just who is this man
Hell, if I even know. ??

Certainly, without question, choices I have made were not my best.
I am haunted by the past, Eyes staring down on me, burning judgment
Right through me, do they not see. I am,

Slipping in and out of consciousness, the anger inside
Is overwhelming me, Because, I am not who they all thought I??d be
Day in and day out, I am living the life of a guilty man
For things I have not even done.

Certainly, without question, life goes on and the world
Will go on never knowing my sorrow and pain
Slowly, slipping, in and out of consciousness
Just a thought, here I go again.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I would split up some of the longer lines, and shape the poem. For example:

Certainly, without question,
my head is spinning out of control.
Under-standing me,
Under-lining you,
Defining the truth as what
We chose it to be or not ??
I am.

It's a good effort though. Keep writing.