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The Stalker Song ..please critique.... ( : you know you want to..?

hi hello
please get to know me
i like you
but names are not important
come into my world and you'll never be the same

join with me
and fill my empty heart
you're a special one
cus i rarely like anyone else

now that
we know each other
i'll show you
everyone else
if you come into my world
you'll never forget
never forget

join with me
and fill my empty heart
just please like me back
i can't stand it if you won't like me back

warm and soft
and together
i'm a broken lock
but you're a broken key...

i was lonely
but you fixed that
i was angry
but you fixed that
now you're going
going away
going away....
I CAN FIX THAT

join with me
and fill my empty heart
i love you
so DON'T YOU DARE LEAVE ME

please don't go away
i really love you
but you gotta stay
because i love you
now i know what to do
and you will never go home
never go home

sunny nights
in the backyard
passionate days
in the backyard
would you like the maple or the pine
come into my world, you won't be the same


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Beautiful! Awesome I can go on and on.
Okay! Let me see "IF" I can describe, what I liked the most.
To be very honest with you, when I see long poems, I try to read first four lines, "IF" I like then I read the whole poem if not, I just skip and don't comment, but the beauty of this poem is, I started, liked it and kept reading, it has all the affection poured into words, I could see that person drawn towards you, flying into your arms, brought smile to my face and a happy feeling.
Before I knew, to my surprise, I found myself finishing the whole poem..........:O
Good job, keep it up.