Question Home

Position:Home>Arts & Humanities> Please read this one...it's one of my first poems i had ever written?


Question:

Please read this one...it's one of my first poems i had ever written?

actually, it's my third poem. i posted it a long time ago but didn't get many reviews. here you go....

title-pirates

yo, ho, ho and a bottle of rum,
i'm drinking it, but don't tell my mum,
i'm a pirate, you are too,
i steal gold, yes, that is what i do!


yo, ho, ho and a bottle of rum,
i'm not very smart, no, i'm just dum,
i sail around, on my ship,
i fell twice, and dislocated my hip.


yo, ho, ho and a bottle of rum,
"a pirates life for me" is what i hum,
strong men fighting, having a drink,
have to be careful or our ship will sink!

yo, ho, ho and a bottle of rum,
87, on the ship,yes, that is the sum,
late at night, time for sleep,
don't plan a mutiney, or your in for a leap.

Additional Details

1 week ago
FYI! it's supposed to be fun to read. cut the criticism for a few minutes and enjoy.

1 week ago
and yes it is mine.

1 week ago
and yes it could be like a song or something.


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: 1 week ago
FYI! it's supposed to be fun to read. cut the criticism for a few minutes and enjoy.