Better portraying the holocaust in my story?

Question:

Better portraying the holocaust in my story?

My holocaust story: http://www.mibba.com/story/jinxyjinx-x/a...

I think you can read it without it saying log in or something.
If it does just tell me.

Anyway, do you think I'm portraying the holocaust well or do I need more details?

Additional Details

1 week ago
Someone has said that you need to log in so i'll just put it on my Yahoo 360 account so you can read it there :)

1 week ago
Link to yahoo 360 blog so you can read the story there:

http://blog.360.yahoo.com/blog-.jxevk8py...

The story's called Angel of Death

1 week ago
Questions answered for Sprouts Mom:

Where was your little sister when you went to school?

She was already at school. Nixie just picks her up after school and walks home with her.

Could you put the year in before the chapters?

Yes I can! Good idea! :)

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: 1 week ago
Someone has said that you need to log in so i'll just put it on my Yahoo 360 account so you can read it there :)