Thoughts on my poem, 'Something You Don??t Know'?

Question:

Thoughts on my poem, 'Something You Don??t Know'?

You are not to blame
Because wherever I go
I see your name
Floating in my thoughts

It??s just something you don??t know

My courage has faded
I look at the phone
And I just can??t do it
This simple gesture
Of calling you

Still my love is true

Yet I don??t know what to do

I don??t know what to say
I watch all my words decay
They all run away
When your name appears
My thoughts are all out of control
I can??t order them
They float all over the broken dam

I hesitate
I think too much
While you??re waiting for a love touch

I??m floating in this flood of thoughts
Of feelings and emotions
My love for you has flooded my clear thinking
I struggle for something clear, something to hold on to

How could I make this known to you?
You question if my love was ever true
You??ll try to start a love anew
I don??t know what to do

You only see silence
A lover??s absence
While I??m lost in the floods
Floating in no direction
I have lost all sense of orientation
In this messy crowd of words
Confusing and noisy like birds

I know to you it would all sound absurd
You??d grab the sword
And win the crazy fight
Not waiting for any ray of light
From the silent darkness of the night

I just lie on my bed
With your image in my head
With the words I??ve never said
While you think you??ve been misled

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I think it's a beautiful poem, rather long but still good. I think you should break it up into a part 1 and 2. If you used more imagery, instead of so much telling your poem would really stand out and be set apart. You could work on the last paragraph of your poem, it sounds too cliche'. Your ending should always be quite stronger than the body. It sounds like you were just trying to hurry up and end. You have a lot of potential and you're an amazing writer. Keep on tuning your gift.