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Dribble (poem)?

All the words that will dribble off my tongue
will find there way into the young
they might mean a lot or they will not mean a jot

The young will take them and spin them around
giving them new meaning and a new sound
build all kinds of new stuff and knock the old down

remember dribble dribbles down.


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I like to read poetry aloud, as this allows the rythmn to sing through. Here are a few lines written by Sir Henry Newbolt about a cricket match. Read them out loud and get a sense of the pace and rythmn....

There's a breathless hush in the Close tonight -
Ten to make and a match to win -
A bumping pitch and a blinding light,
An hour to play and the last man in.

Highly evocative, I think.

I really like your poem, it has some nice imagery but I really feel it could do with one more edit. If you read it out loud a couple of times you may agree with me that some words could be edited as they obstruct the rythmn and obscure the imagery.

By the way the final line is excellent!

Good luck!