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Do you like my poem?

please give me suggestions or anything that can improve it. This was made for my Father today for his birthday on June 30th.. please answer

when i came in the world
i was bundled up and curled
took some steps with you right there
snug just like a little bear

dancing tumbling you support
forever you shall be my escort
like a flower I seem to grow
your my gardner furthermore

sitting close to my heart
like a crystal clear love chart
I may grow and seem to leave
but forever you will stay next to me

its your birthday so to say
i wish it would be everyday
becasue of you I am alive
happily letting time pass me by


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: It's great, your dad will love it !