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Can you please tell me how I can improve this poem? (needs a title)?

This is the third reapeat, but please no kiss *** answers because that won't help me at all. THANK YOU! (It still needs a title though)


The autumn frost shields the morning sun,
glistening fragments of ice
cover the ground.
darkness.

My thoughts swirl and buzz
??Seven wounded and twenty-four dead??
squawks the radio.
I stare at the floor, the world spins around me
war.

I grab my sisters tiny hand, pulling her toward the lake.
The beauty of the water could not be seen
under the thin sheet of ice
but she reached for it anyways.

She began to play in the frost
forming lines
then letters.
the letters formed a word,
and the word was beautiful.

PEACE

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1 week ago
whoops... getting my tense messed up... 'But she reaches for it anyways'

THANK YOU!


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: 1 week ago
whoops... getting my tense messed up... 'But she reaches for it anyways'

THANK YOU!