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Chapter 1



This was a night to remember. As usual when everyone was asleep I went outside for a walk. Creek! The wooden door needs a lot of fixing! But Dad doesn??t do anything about it! I??m just lucky enough that nobody knows I was going out. I go out for a stroll in the park and sit on the swings and just ponder. I was wondering what my real mother must be doing right now. Let me tell you everything from the beginning. I was born in Colorado. My mom and dad loved me very much. They had named me Kelly Del but one dark night, my dad got into an accident during a storm. I was only three then and it was hard for my mom to get out of this shock. So when I was about six years old my mom decided to put me into an orphanage home. She told me she was going away for a tour at work and she would come back to get me the very next day. But she never came back?? I always thought that the reason she didn??t come back was because she wasn??t able to give me a normal living. But still I waited each and everyday, when their came one day, after almost one year later, that I was told I was going into a foster home. I was horrified. The family seemed nice??but then again??what better do I know? Mrs. Felon, who had been taking care of me for a year, took me into a bright room. There was Mr. Sheldon on the other side of the table, a man who was wearing a bright yellow shirt and jeans, a woman who was wearing a dark blue shirt with a brown scarf, and a girl wearing a flowered shirt and skirt who seemed almost my age. Mr. Sheldon told me to take a seat next to the woman. I sat down and Mrs. Felon sat next to me. They told me I had no other choice other then agreeing to live with the new family. But still they asked me if it was okay with me or not??I thought about what to say??I was really confused. If I didn??t have a choice then why were they making it seem like there was??I said to him ??Well since you have already made the decision, what else can I say??? He said ??Okay.?? They all talked with each other. The man across the table told the family some information about me. Like, I was 7 years old; I??ve been living here for almost a year, my dad died when I was three and etc. The man and woman told the man ??We don??t want to know anything more about her past other than her behavior. I mean, is she quiet, shy, mean, excited, etc.?? The man said, ??Well there is much to say about her??she is very quiet, but not shy, she is absolutely not mean! There hasn??t been anything that has lead her to become excited so I don??t think there is much to say about that. But she has been a pleasure to have around here.?? He gave me a quick smile. I hadn??t ever seen him in my life. Than how did he know so much about me? I was getting a bit nervous, but then I thought that well, Mrs. Felon or someone else told him that. Than the women said, ??Okay, we have made our decision! We have decided to take her into our home!?? Everyone became very excited. Especially the girl! She said to the women, ??Mommy! Mommy! Is she my new sister? Mommy!!?? Answer me! Is she my new sister??? Her mother said ??Yes, Sammy! What do you want to name her? Do you want to name her Natalie??? I cried out ??WHAT? You can??t change my name!! Mrs. Felon!! They can??t change my name right??? Mrs. Felon gave the man a look. She said ??Well since you do belong to them now they can change your name!?? The woman said ??Honey, its okay. If you don??t want to change your name, than it??s fine with me! Now let me introduce us to you. I??m Sandy Howard, and I??m your new mother! This is my husband, you??re new father, Joey Howard, and this is Samantha Howard, your new sister.?? I said sadly, ??I have to change my last name??? Sandy said ??Yes, you are our new daughter which means your part of our family! So now your name is Kelly Howard??now doesn??t that sound great??? I thought about it for a while. I do have to live with them now. Which means I will have to compromise something??s, even if it my name. ??Okay Sandy, if that??s what you wish.?? Sandy said, ??Honey, you can call me mom! After all I am your mom now, right??? I said to her in a low voice ??Okay, mom.?? I never in my life had thought I would have to see a day like this one. How could I have let these people take the place of my parents? I was crying in the inside. But I don??t think anyone noticed. When Joey said, ??Kelly, we understand that this is going to be hard for you, but we want you to be part of our family and this is something that you have to do. We know you might be too young to understand what I am trying to say. But hey, now you have your own sister! Here why don??t you come and sit next to Sammy.?? I got up from my chair, and sat next to Sammy. I just looked at her. And she just looked at me. I said, ??Hi, I??m Kelly.?? She said, ??Hi Kelly, I??m Samantha, Sammy for short. Guess what? I??m your new younger sister! We??re going to play together. And we??re going to go to the same school and???? I stopped her right there. ??School? I??m going to go to school??? ??Yes you are! You and Sammy are going to go to Stevenson School.?? said Mom. I never thought that I would ever be able to go to school. I mean, I have gone to school before. But after what happened I never thought??.But anyways, I was very excited about going to the same school as my new sister. I wanted to know all about her! So I started to ask her if she had something special she loved very much. She answered, ??Yeah, Kelly! I have this bear. And I call it Mr. Bear! Isn??t that a nice name??? I didn??t answer. I was thinking about the bear my mom had given to me the day before I came here. I had called it Benny. Mommy had given it to me with so much love. Snap, Snap! ??Kelly? What happened??? asked Dad. I said, ??Nothing, I just remembered the bear my mommy had given to me the day before I had come here.?? Sammy asked me again, ??Kelly! What do you think of my bear??s name??? I said to her ??I think that??s a very nice name.?? Mom told Mr. Sheldon that she and Dad would come tomorrow to sign some of the leftover papers. They said to me and Sammy, ??Let??s go kids. Come on Kelly, we??re going to show you your new home.??
























Chapter 2



I was very scared. My life changed that very moment, because I thought that I would never get to see my mother again??and I would never get to know the secret of why my mother sent me here in the first place. They had a very nice dark blue colored Chevrolet. I sat in the back seat next to Sammy and wore my seat belt. I didn??t even know what happened after I sat in the car because I fell asleep the very next minute. When I woke up I saw Kelly sleeping in the bed next to mine. The room had light pink paint. There were pretty stickers up on the wall all around us. The wall was right next to mine and on top of the bed someone had placed many teddy bears of all colors. There was also a small TV across the room. Half of the room was filled with Sammy??s pictures and the other half of the room was empty. Right then, mom stepped into the room. She greeted me with a bright, ??Good morning, Kelly!?? I replied with an excited, ??Good morning, mom! Is this also my room??? ??Yes, of course. As you can see half of the room is filled with Sammy??s pictures. And now the other half will be filled with your pictures. We will capture every moment of happiness with you. And I promise there won??t be a tear in your eyes from now onwards.?? I gave a warm smile. She reminded me of mommy. I was so happy now that I had gotten a chance to live with this awesome family. All of a sudden, from behind her hands she took out a camera and said, ??Say cheese Kelly!?? I was so surprised! She then told me to go into the bathroom and get ready, because after breakfast she was going to give me a tour of the house and take me outside

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1 week ago
im not like planning to make it into a published book or anything...but i started writing and im planning to make it like atleast 60 pages. .

1 week ago
how is the story? should i make any changes? and what else cud i add on that cud make a twist into the story? thanks for helping


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: 1 week ago
im not like planning to make it into a published book or anything...but i started writing and im planning to make it like atleast 60 pages. .