What do you think of my poem?

Question:

What do you think of my poem?

Like... What kind of feeling (if any) does it evoke? Is it okay for a beginner? Could it maybe be a song?

In the nighttime the world is
A black and white photograph
Everything still and lovely

Alone, ducking under weeping willows
Their tears brush my shoulders
You are only a shout away, it seems
Only a shout away

Alone, walking beside a moonlit lake
Pale silver painted waves
You are only a shout away, it seems
Only a shout away

Alone, passing that old bench we sat on
Just a lifetime ago
You are only a shout away, it seems
Only a shout away

I shout
The silence and tranquility
shatters
You are gone and here I am
alone

In the nighttime the world is
a black and white photograph
Everything still and lovely

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: It could be a song if you twist it around a little bit. I would say that the phrase "You are only a shout away, it seems, only a shout away" could be a good chorus with a couple more phrases added to it. If you did this, i would recomend combining paragraph 1 and 2 into being the first verse. Then paragraph 3 and 4 into the 2nd verse. Then paragraph 5 into a bridge (short verse leading to the end of a song). Then repeat paragraph 6 couple of times for an ending.

I like it as a gorgeous poem too. It is very good if you are just beginning.