'Poems on the Ground' - your thoughts on my new poem?

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'Poems on the Ground' - your thoughts on my new poem?

I ran and ran, happy yet in denial
The doctors unsew my heart
And had me pull away the last needle and string
My thousand heartbeats you never heard
To let out of my soul
The rhythm and song of love
To set free, to fly into this world

I was about to die in my denial
The doctors struggled to have me revived

I got up and saw, out of the window
Poems falling to the ground
I took them in my hands

Poems not meant for me
The poet of the dark let them fall from his tree
Trying to conquer his lady

Fascinated by his mystery
Remembering my own story

Same story of denial
Same feelings of betrayal

I let my own poems fall to the ground
I let myself hear my illusions' sound

Our poems should make their voices heard
Never to see lovers dying in the world

Let us see poems on the ground
Not lovers' voices killed, losing their sound

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Its actually kinda good... kudos! maybe invest in a good thesaurus...