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'Indian Lover' - comments on my poem please?

To warm winter I lost my Indian lover
Never found another gentle mood carver

Winter was warm, while he grew cold
Not too many words had he told

I had been silent for a while
For many days of warm winter left to rest on a pile

I was left aside by him, unforgiven
By remorse and sadness driven

Cold winter was the short beginning
Hot summer held the deeper meaning

Then a gentle winter like the spring
Could only the end quickly bring


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Very nice. I like the way you wrote this. It has a true poetic flow to it, and it actually made me feel a bit sad. I enjoy a poem that can stir an emotion, even if it's sadness.
Thanks :)