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Position:Home>Arts & Humanities> My poem, 'You' - opinions, please?Question: My poem, 'You' - opinions, please?My mask of ice I let down Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: If it is your begining one, then think, this is the best start. If you don't feel bad, may I have a sugetion of some changes in it. My mask of ice I let down In front of those eyes, for you I gave up my crown for you but you broke through my frozen heart. You brought me back to life And rejuvenated it a fresh You placed that slayuer knife away from me And you made sure I'll have survived All the dangers I have long time denied (this line is not giving proper meaning and co-relating with the below) You kept close to your heart All the tears I have cried You made for me a fresh start For you I came down from my skies With my past I broke all ties All I ask from you is to throw her out of the door If not, I'll have her lie dead forever on the seashore Note : it is upto you to accept. Thanks anyway. |