Question:
RATE my poem .. PLZZZZZZZ !!?
i sent my poem to poetry.com but they refused to publish it .. right now i'm so upset .. donno what to do ..
May be it was a wrong idea to write an English poem ? ( As i'm an Arabian guy ) .. May be i'm not that good in English ? .. donno ..
can you just please rate my poem and tell me how to edit it to make it even acceptable ?
Brother
I can feel your blood
Flowing in my heart,
I can hear your breath
Moving in my lungs,
I can see your tears
Running down my face,
My life without you
Is an empty place,
Because your land is my land,
Because your blood is my blood,
And your soul is my soul,
Cause we all are one hand,
When you cry
I feel your pain,
When you are wounded
I bleed again,
When you feel happy
I fly high,
When you succeed
I can touch the sky.
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I like it. Read it thrice already. Put it to music and make it into a song.