Revised poem, open for cristism.?

Question:

Revised poem, open for cristism.?

Into a world full of pleasure
Enter the doors of heaven to see
A world that posseses your hidden treasure

Where the air is seductive
And the water serene
Where the sky is full of love
And the sun shines endless joy

Close your eyes
Run away from the corrupted society
Make your dreams and wishes
Nothing less than your own reality
Escape from your misery
Diminish the pain, and inspire euphoria

Take your hands and feel
A touch, too good to be real
Open your eyes and see
A land, beautiful as can be

Experience a feeling beyond serenity...
As you rest on the clouds with the sun kissing your face
Experience a feeling beyond tranquility...
As you disappear in the silence of outer space

Invigorate your soul with delight
Darkness dissipates, everything feels so right
Your dark soul has burned to its demise
Love and cherish those you have chosen to despise

Fulfill the empty spaces in your heart
With empathy and trust
And unveil the meaning of life

(Inspired by the experience on MDMA)

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: i really like it, no need to critize it either. would be nice if it was a little shorter, but i think if you shorten it now, people would miss the point. you are a great writer ♥