Need ur opinions.....(also rate this poem on the scale of 1 - 10.)?

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Need ur opinions.....(also rate this poem on the scale of 1 - 10.)?

world's becoming restless day by day
for fulfilling their greedy needs
they r trying every possible way

man is killing man 4 his selfish ends
regardless of anyone's sentiments n emotions.
to make this world better,there r no amends.

people r forgetting fraternity
n r simply becoming unscrupulous
that engenders cruelty n disunity.

its not merely a poem
its a message to one n all
to maintain world peace n harmony
to get together 4 development
n STAND TALL.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: It is hard for me to give you a rating on a scale of 1 to something. You may have a great message here I don't know. Because honestly, if the reader is forced to mentally turn r into are, and 4 into for, and n into and, then they are violently ripped out of this poem.

Please, I'm not trying to be hard on you, but if you want your poems to be taken seriously you have to eliminate internet speak shortcuts in them.