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'Denial' - opinions on my poem pls?

My own denial made me burn gently in hell's fire:
Something kept me on the spot, never could utter a word
To tell him anything beautiful at all -
I hugged his poems, hiding, on the lightless hall;
His words, I heard them time and time again
My eyes closed, be it sunny, be it rain;
I brought him so often in my thoughts,
I fell asleep with his image in front of my eyes closed.
I was afraid of it all, I got angry at his call
We argued, I wanted to start a fight
I saw him disliking the scene, I cried at the sight
He left, till I would calm down, I cried by myself all through every night...

Trying to get me out of my denial,
He reproached me for my fear to fall for him - like a betrayal


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: It is good. Maybe shorten the lines down to their basic expressions.